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Cruel Silence: A poem about Christ standing in silence before his accusers in the court of Pilate
Posted by Douglas, Nov 25, 2009. 1988 views. ID = 2983

Cruel Silence

Posted by Douglas, Nov 25, 2009. 1988 views. ID = 2983
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We talk about the crown of thorns, the nails, the beatings, and the cross itself, but we tend to forget this torment of the Passion: that Christ stood in silence while liars maligned His character.

Another Elizabethan Sonnet. The couplet is a slant rhyme, because I couldn't figure out a way to convey the meaning I wanted AND have a perfect rhyme. If anyone has ideas, let me know. :)
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Forsaken Lamb, how could You e'er endure
To stand in silence there before the bar -
While wicked men, deceptive and impure
Spoke lies, defamed Your holy character?
A single word from You would cease the lies,
Would put your enemies to scorn and shame,
Would open wide the judge's blinded eyes,
Restore again the stature of Your name.
Yet You, my dying God, did mutely stand,
And let the truth remain untold, unknown;
Forsaken Lamb, was this the shame You planned,
To be maligned for love, and love alone?
And would I share in fellowship with Thee,
May I, as well, by silence purchase peace.

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This post is part of a writing prompt: Thanksgiving Poem

Comments


Jeff Howe
Jan 7, 2010
Doug, my idea is that you stick with the slant rhyme. You have it as well with 'bar' and 'character'. Too many people try to jam their piece into a mold of perfect rhymes, and this comes across as forced. It is my opinion, and from what I've read of the masters, theirs as well, that the message trumps the form. Even Shakespeare forsook perfect at times to ensure the message came across correctly. Leave your poem as is... it is fine. Jeff
   ~Posted by Jeff Howe, Jan 7, 2010

Douglas
Jan 9, 2010
Thanks, Jeff. :)
   ~Posted by Douglas, Jan 9, 2010



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