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Captain Richard Gets stuck on his ship.
Posted by Mathax, Jan 16. 110 views. ID = 508
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 | This is a random piece I dicied to write about the Setequarl and the first writing prompt. |  | This post has been awarded 5 stars by 2 readers. |  | This post is Part 9 of a writing series titled The adventures of the Setequarl. |
On the day the elevator got stuck on the 37th floor, Aweon's life was forever changed. but for better or for worse she did not know. Because who would be in the elevator but Captain Richard.
"Oh on," Aweon said, as the elevator slowed to a stop, Her eye went to the botton that said where they were, "Just between the 36th and 37th floors captain, we can't get out with out getting it fixed."
"Rebecca," said Richard, "are you reading any elevator breaks any where?"
"No," said Rebecca, "wait, I have one coming in now, elevator green."
"That is the one I am in," Said Richard, "You need to get it fixed." To Aweon, "what is your name?"
"Aweon sir," Said Aweon.
"Well Aweon, it looks like we will be here for a while. Is this your first assiment?" Said Richard.
"Yes sir," she said.
"Well welcome to space, and a life of adventure." Said Richard.
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Comments
Katie
Jan 16 | You know 'thax, I actually like where you're going with this. I've been meaning to leave a message on your other posts about the Setequarl. I wanted to say that I think we're in need of some character development. You started right in on the action, and we don't even know who the characters are really. I mean, we know what they *do*, but not whether they're people that can be trusted, or if they're good at their job, or if they have a family life, etc. We don't know anything about the *person*. I think that if you could add some of that into your posts, gradually, mind, it would make for better reading.
~Posted by Katie, Jan 16 |
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