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Temporary Castles: Learning to appreciate beauty wherever it's found, for as long as it lasts.
Posted by Sylvan Sylph, Apr 6, 2008. 1450 views. ID = 1073

Temporary Castles

Posted by Sylvan Sylph, Apr 6, 2008. 1450 views. ID = 1073
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Sometimes it's easy to get caught up in comparisons and in trying to be better than other people. It's easy to forget to do things for the pure joy of doing them and to enjoy what other people do because they enjoy it. Our culture is often focused on success being defined by outdoing someone else. We somehow feel better about what what we do by minimizing what someone else has done. We forget that, in the end, someone will always be better than we are; and ultimately, everything we do will fade away anyway. If we could learn to take pride in our work for its own merit and to value the work of others because we value those who do it, we would be far happier.
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I'm building castles in the sand.
I watch the waves wash them all away
At the end of every day.
You're building castles in the snow,
Just to watch the sun melt them away
At the end of every day.

Who can say if what I do
Is more beautiful than you?
At the end of the day who can know?
Because there's nothing left to show,
For all the time we spent;
For all the work we've done.

This beach is my gallery.
This sand is my palette and my canvas.
That field is your gallery.
That snow is your palette and your canvas.
We are not so different you and I.
What do we have left to hide?
Everything is turned to water.
Everything is washed away.


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Comments


Douglas
Apr 7, 2008
I like the snow/sand contrast. :)
   ~Posted by Douglas, Apr 7, 2008

Mathax
Apr 7, 2008
You should try to make castles in the air and see the wind blow them away.
   ~Posted by Mathax, Apr 7, 2008

Sylvan Sylph
Apr 7, 2008
The castles in the air is a nice concept, but it's a little too intangible for this piece, I think. Plus it would mess up the person to person contrast.
   ~Posted by Sylvan Sylph, Apr 7, 2008

Aimster du Clarkentine
Apr 8, 2008
Poor Ozymandias didn't understand this.
   ~Posted by Aimster du Clarkentine, Apr 8, 2008

Aimster du Clarkentine
Apr 15, 2008
Ok, you need to come to Germany again with me. Castles galore....so many the gov. can't keep them up and consequently they're crumbling...How many did you see the last time you were there?
   ~Posted by Aimster du Clarkentine, Apr 15, 2008

Sylvan Sylph
Apr 15, 2008
I can't remember exactly. It was somewhere around 5 or 6 up close in Germany. Then we went to Prague and saw the one there. I love old European architecture.

Our trip to Prague was actually part of the inspiration for this piece. We built a little castle in the street with the dirty snow.
   ~Posted by Sylvan Sylph, Apr 15, 2008

Laura
Apr 16, 2008
I like this - it's very direct, and yet I can clearly see the images in my mind.
   ~Posted by Laura, Apr 16, 2008



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