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If Wishes Were Fishes
Posted by wordsmith, Feb 12, 2009. 534 views. ID = 2328
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If wishes were fishes we’d all eat like kings
If wishes were feathers then we’d all have wings
If whishes were riches we’d all have gold mines
If wishes were pitch forks we’d all have four tines
But wishes aren’t fishes; I eat like a serf
And wishes aren’t feathers; I’m stuck to the turf
Though I wish, I’ve no riches; I’m poor as can be
But that’s just how I like it, and I’m always happy
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Douglas
Feb 13, 2009 | Nice poem. The lack of punctuation in this line makes it a bit confusing: Though I wish I’ve no riches I’m poor as can be.
I think what you want is: Though I wish, I’ve no riches; I’m poor as can be
Otherwise it sounds like you're wishing that you had no riches, and I don't think that's what you intended! :)
~Posted by Douglas, Feb 13, 2009 |
wordsmith
Feb 13, 2009 | Thanks for the advice. It does make more sense now.
~Posted by wordsmith, Feb 13, 2009 |
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