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Voiceless words: Or so I would assume...
Posted by Laura, Jan 27, 2010. 1868 views. ID = 3141

Voiceless words

Posted by Laura, Jan 27, 2010. 1868 views. ID = 3141
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The air we share does not demand
Another word be spoken.

Beyond despair, the silence speaks
And voices its heartfelt token.

Devotion is silent, but seen and felt
By two who reciprocate.

The quietest love need not be voiced
When words would only complicate.

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Jan 27, 2010
I love the concept of this poem, but I'm going to have to read it again tomorrow when I'm more awake.
   ~Posted by Douglas, Jan 27, 2010

Jan 28, 2010
heh...last night when I read this, I thought "I think she left out the word 'be' in the second to last line. I see you've fixed that now. :)

The only other thing that jumped out at me was, the spoken/token rhyme felt a little forced to me.

This poem reminds me of the book of Job, and Job's three friends who came and sat with him for seven days...and said nothing.

Sometimes love is silent, and sometimes silence is more peaceful and tranquil than any words.
   ~Posted by Douglas, Jan 28, 2010

Jan 28, 2010
Haha, yes, apparently I was not the only one who wasn't very awake last night ;-)

Yeah, I like that part of Job... and I think perhaps he would have benefited more if they had continued in that fashion. Sometimes it's hard to feel like you're 'contributing' to helping someone when you aren't saying anything, but silence can be a gift during certain times, I think.

I'll have to see what I can do about that rhyme... I seem to remember college writing professors warning about the passive voice, but I don't remember exactly why... I guess this explains it.

   ~Posted by Laura, Jan 28, 2010

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