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January: My feelings as of today.
Posted by Laura, Jan 29, 2010. 989 views. ID = 3144

January

Posted by Laura, Jan 29, 2010. 989 views. ID = 3144
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I learned an interesting lesson with this one. This poem was originally two verses long. I had typed it in notepad on my computer, and went to copy it elsewhere so I could trim it down a bit, and then saw a giant "C" come up in place of the text I'd just highlighted. Oops. No automatic draft-save on that little application. So I was rather discouraged and wasn't going to bother re-typing it, but then I did, and only ended up with one verse... but what I figure is that this may have been a fortunate happenstance, seeing as it forced me to recall only what I felt was most important to the poem.
Having said all that, I still feel like it needs work, but the first step has been taken anyway. Sometimes, as my Poetry Writing professor once said, you have to "murder your darlings."
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It would be to our benefit to forget
you, gray and dreary chasm between that
season of family and the season of "love",
fixed to keep them from running into each other.
January, you work to passively smite us, and those
new beginnings you crush with relentless apathy,
whispering words of excuse on wintry winds,
telling us it's good enough to just survive,
at least, if only, some other time,
we really did try, but you threw this whole
thing into gear before we were ready,
ticking off the days just as fast as
any non-beginning or happy plateau would do -
so that time just floats from memory, and
all that thrives is what was formed before
the party ended, fed by friendship, until
only you, January, cold and cruel,
show us which resolves are true.

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Comments


Douglas
Jan 30, 2010
So you disagree with Eliot, that April is the cruelest month? ;)
   ~Posted by Douglas, Jan 30, 2010

Laura
Jan 30, 2010
Hehe, I don't think I've read the whole thing, but yes, I would have to disagree :-D
   ~Posted by Laura, Jan 30, 2010

'Chelle
Feb 3, 2010
laura,
i like january as a month, but this sums up what happens to my resolutions every year. would it be different if we made them in june? probably not...=)
   ~Posted by 'Chelle, Feb 3, 2010



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