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Pennies: The first line came to me, so I wrote a little more
Posted by Laura, Jul 26, 2008. 2401 views. ID = 1512


Posted by Laura, Jul 26, 2008. 2401 views. ID = 1512
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I suppose the last two lines got me thinking of a certain Langston Hughes poem...
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I could live on pennies
if my thoughts could buy me bread.
And I could dream for days on end
if that would keep me fed.
But hands are far more practical
than wishes ever were.
If daily needs are to be met,
some dreams must stay deferred.

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Jul 27, 2008
I really like this poem (which is why it ended up in the featured gallery) :) But I did puzzle over a couple word choices...

I wondered about the word "studious", and I also wondered about "daily work is to be met", and wondered if what you meant was "daily needs are to be met"?
   ~Posted by Douglas, Jul 27, 2008

Jul 29, 2008
Hmm, thanks for bringing that up... I suppose the point isn't that mental exertion is any less studious than physical. I'll think about that one... maybe "tangible" is what I'm looking for.
I think I was going for something like a work tally or "quota" in the second-to-last line - some sort of expectation, although it seems that phrasing isn't quite getting that across either.
   ~Posted by Laura, Jul 29, 2008

Aug 7, 2008
Maybe "productive" rather than "studious"
   ~Posted by clayman, Aug 7, 2008

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