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Sharing....: this is something based on intimacy
Posted by Chilly, Feb 27, 2009. 3731 views. ID = 2395


Posted by Chilly, Feb 27, 2009. 3731 views. ID = 2395
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For N... she inspires me
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Sharing one umbrella
We have to hold each other
'Round the waist to keep together

You ask me why I'm smiling
It's because I'm thinking.......

I want it to rain forever

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Feb 28, 2009
Nice poem! And welcome to the site. :)

I don't know if you intended it, but you have a fairly solid iambic meter (every other syllable stressed) until you get to the very last line.

If you wanted to make the last line iambic as well, it would be a fairly easy fix - something like "I want the rain to last forever" would do the job.

I'm adding this poem to the featured gallery.
   ~Posted by Douglas, Feb 28, 2009

Feb 28, 2009
I love this! So simple, yet it says a lot.
   ~Posted by Laura, Feb 28, 2009

Mar 2, 2009
I love the thought!
   ~Posted by MrPhysics, Mar 2, 2009

Sep 24, 2009
really good . It really made me feel that I was there.
   ~Posted by erika, Sep 24, 2009

Nov 2, 2009
I love this. Not only does it make me feel like I'm on the street with them, witnessing the moment, it makes me wish I were one of them. Very simple, but exactly how it should be. :)
   ~Posted by Audrey_E_Marquis, Nov 2, 2009

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