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Hesitation.: a new character
Posted by Kenzie Fell Down, Mar 29, 2008. 1851 views. ID = 972

Hesitation.

Posted by Kenzie Fell Down, Mar 29, 2008. 1851 views. ID = 972
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This post is Part 1 of a writing series titled Day Jarvis, Teenager Extraordinaire.

My name's Day Jarvis... Yes, Day.

My Mum always said she picked it because Dawn was too demanding, Dusk was too overbearing, and Night was just asking for trouble. I still remember how she used to tell me, the same every time, leaning forward as if the words she was about to impart were a secret only meant for us two, and in that conspiratorial whisper she'd set them loose, just for a moment, in our little kitchen, 'But Day, well, we could all use a few more of those, huh girl?' Then she'd sit back in her chair and tell me it was my Dad who'd thought of that. And, always, I'd ask her about him, and her face would go all bright and her voice all broad, like when she told me bedtime stories, and she'd spin magnificent tales of my brave prince father, who couldn't tuck me in at night because he was busy saving the world's princess population, and fighting off dragons who tried to burn down towns. And every night I prayed for him to be safe, and beat all the dragons, only to please not hurt them too bad, cause they were probably nice when you took the time to get to know them.

That was back when I was still little, when I still believed in all that stuff, when we still had time for it. Now, my Mum's too busy to tell me stories about my long-lost father, because her boss thinks that the best way to care for children is to 'give them space and enough money and things to keep them out of trouble.' That's what she says to rationalize the huge long hours she makes my poor Mum work now. Most kids my age would doubtless encourage this mentality, but secretly, I gotta tell you, I'd rather she sat in our kitchen and told me stories than that she got me the latest i-pod for my birthday.

Eh, I just keep telling myself I'm too old anyway, and by now I believe it. Mostly. I still pray for my old man to be safe though, wherever he is.

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Comments


Douglas
Mar 30, 2008
Nicely done. :) You've introduced and developed a character in just a few lines. I especially liked the line about dragons - gives us good insight into the kind of person Day is.
   ~Posted by Douglas, Mar 30, 2008

Kenzie Fell Down
Mar 30, 2008
Thanks.
   ~Posted by Kenzie Fell Down, Mar 30, 2008

Katie
Mar 31, 2008
*agrees with Doug* Well done! :-)
   ~Posted by Katie, Mar 31, 2008

Kenzie Fell Down
Apr 4, 2008
Thank you again.
   ~Posted by Kenzie Fell Down, Apr 4, 2008



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