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Yes, jewelious is a made-up word.: my random poem.
Posted by Kenzie Fell Down, Feb 18, 2008. 2315 views. ID = 606

Yes, jewelious is a made-up word.

Posted by Kenzie Fell Down, Feb 18, 2008. 2315 views. ID = 606
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I am not actually sitting here looking into a fly's eyes as I type this, but whatever.
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Have you ever seen such jewelious eyes
As the glorious, faceted red orbs of the flies?
They glisten and glitter,
They glint and they shine.
The flies are rather dull
But for their eyes so fine.
A source of great boasting
And pride in bugkind,
Those gemlike percievers
For those plain little minds.

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Comments


Trent
Feb 18, 2008
Very nice.
   ~Posted by Trent, Feb 18, 2008

Kenzie Fell Down
Feb 18, 2008
Thank you.
   ~Posted by Kenzie Fell Down, Feb 18, 2008

Michael K
Feb 19, 2008
This is fun stuff here. I did have to read these lines two or three times to figure it out:

The flies rather dull
But for their eyes so fine.

And I thought maybe you meant to do a contraction:

fly's (fly is)

Or maybe you meant it to be plural, in which case you're missing a verb:

The flies are rather dull.

Then, on the other hand, if you meant it to be singular, you should have said "his eyes" or "her eyes"...

And now I'm going to stop writing, because I'm not sure what you meant, so my advice probably isn't very useful! :-/
   ~Posted by Michael K, Feb 19, 2008

Kenzie Fell Down
Feb 19, 2008
Oh, sorry. Better?
   ~Posted by Kenzie Fell Down, Feb 19, 2008

.
Feb 22, 2008
That's brilliant! Simple but very good. I really enjoyed it.
   ~Posted by ., Feb 22, 2008

Hannah
Feb 22, 2008
Wow, I think you might have picked the most random of mundane objects. Great job! ;)
   ~Posted by Hannah, Feb 22, 2008

Kenzie Fell Down
Feb 22, 2008
Thanks.
   ~Posted by Kenzie Fell Down, Feb 22, 2008



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