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A Little Fantasy: "Master, tell us the story once again.Tell us the story of men with wings"
Posted by Estrella LeMar, Feb 6, 2008. 2073 views. ID = 563

A Little Fantasy

Posted by Estrella LeMar, Feb 6, 2008. 2073 views. ID = 563
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"Fantasy my little friends? No, they are not fantasy." Gabriel shook his head at the five little boys.

"Master, tell us the story once again.Tell us the story of men with wings"

Gabriel nodded, "Alright...

There is a race of beings, beings that can apear as humans, as birds, or any creature they choose. They are protectors, and healers; they are among us every day. These creatures spend their time disguised, and dwelling among the human kind, protecting them."

"But why do they do it sir?" One of the boys piped in.


"They are following thier orders. " Gabriel smiled gently, " and they want to."

"Even when people do bad things? Do those creatures protect them even then?" questioned one child.

"It is up to thier master." Gabriel looked lovingly down at the children.

"Hmph, I think it is a just a story." One of the boys stood up and stomped his foot angrily, "No such thing could be true." Turning, the boy stomped away towards the cliffs edge.


"Master, is it just a sto-"

"Ahh!" Everyone turned to see the boy trip at the top of the cliff, and tumble over the edge. Gabriel was up on his feat in an instant. Running towards the cliffs edge, he jumped after the boy.

The remaining boys looked at each other in shock; it happened so fast. They could do nothing, they were frozen in place.

Once Gabriel had caught the boy, he spread his wings out wide, and circled round to catch the breeze. Gently he carried the boy back to the top of the hill. Setting the boy down, Gabriel spoke, "Are you alright?"

Eyes wide, the boy nodded.

Everyone heard footsteaps aprouching up the pathway, and the boys all turned to look. It was Professor Ross. "And what are you youngsters doing here all by yourselves?" He questioned.

One boy shook his head, "But we are not alone Professor."

"Oh?" The professor questioned, "And who may I ask, is with you?"

The boys looked around, Gabriel was gone.

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Comments


Michael K
Feb 6, 2008
This is really nice! I did notice a couple repeated mistakes...

"their" instead of "thier"

and

"cliff's edge" instead of "cliffs edge"
   ~Posted by Michael K, Feb 6, 2008

Estrella LeMar
Feb 6, 2008
thank you for pointing that out. Spelling and grammar are not my strong points
   ~Posted by Estrella LeMar, Feb 6, 2008

Lynnde
Feb 6, 2008
Also, "on his feat " and "footsteaps".
   ~Posted by Lynnde, Feb 6, 2008

Lynnde
Feb 6, 2008
and "aprouching".
   ~Posted by Lynnde, Feb 6, 2008

Katie
Feb 7, 2008
I like this! It's very good. :-)
But the name Gabriel kind of gives it away.
   ~Posted by Katie, Feb 7, 2008

Estrella LeMar
Feb 7, 2008
maybe to us, but many people do not know who Gabriel is.
To the children in the story, and many children in todays world, that would not be obvious
   ~Posted by Estrella LeMar, Feb 7, 2008

Katie
Feb 7, 2008
True
   ~Posted by Katie, Feb 7, 2008

Mathax
Feb 7, 2008
Unfortunately.
   ~Posted by Mathax, Feb 7, 2008

Kenzie Fell Down
Feb 9, 2008
I like it. But I think it is 'their'.
   ~Posted by Kenzie Fell Down, Feb 9, 2008



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