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At the Mall: The mall during Christmas shopping
Posted by Joy12, Dec 5, 2010. 908 views. ID = 4194

At the Mall

Posted by Joy12, Dec 5, 2010. 908 views. ID = 4194
This post was written in 14 minutes.
I am not much of a shopper, but I can't escape the lure either. :)
And I appreciate all comments and suggestions for improvement.
This post has been awarded 8 stars by 2 readers.

That time of the year: the mall
brims with bags
dyed in colorful graphics,
like carafes of sweet wine
making people drunk
as ads glare to claim
their next victim
in the throes of infernal zeal.
Toys, labels, purses...

But I must stop and look
at faces to assess how
this jolly spell turns mortals
into picky gods who let off steam
at the cash register,
after waiting in motionless lines.

Surely, gifting was decreed to be
the essence of human desire,
but if so, I wonder why
old seasonal songs come back
to shriek inside
the stores' loud speakers
like the lure of sirens.
Fala-la-la-la la la la la…


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This post has been awarded 8 stars by 2 readers.
This post is part of a writing prompt: Christmas Shopping

Comments


Elizabeth L
Dec 8, 2010
Wow, love the descriptiveness here - your unique choice of words really paints pictures. :)
   ~Posted by Elizabeth L, Dec 8, 2010

Joy12
Dec 10, 2010
Thank you!
   ~Posted by Joy12, Dec 10, 2010



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