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Dear Santa,: Chrstmas '09
Posted by lindareed, Dec 16, 2009. 4334 views. ID = 3032

Dear Santa,

Posted by lindareed, Dec 16, 2009. 4334 views. ID = 3032
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'Supposed to be funny... I don't know if it worked. Ha ha.
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Dear Santa,

I've really tried to be a good girl this year. Ya know? To make up for last Christmas, which I still haven't forgiven you for by the way. The worst thing I did that year was pour coffee down little Drake's shirt. I thought you were supposed to give us a little slack, everyone makes mistakes sometime or another. I still can't believe that all you gave me was a crummy sweater. It's brown, for crying out loud! Sweaters are bad enough without being colored a horrendous shade of tan.

But let's forget about that for now. It's the Christmas Season! I'm personally looking forward to another year with my favorite man in red. I know your probably wondering if I'm ever going to get to it, so here it is. My 2009 Christmas list:
A new Barbie Doll, a red wagon, a choo-choo train that plumes smoke and everything, lots and lots of candy and one of those little action guys that shoot lasers that I saw TV.

Well I better let you get back to your Christmas duties. Lots of hugs and kisses,

Susan


P.S. Don't tell my husband about this. He told me not to write to you any more.

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Comments


Douglas
Dec 16, 2009
ha ha...I love it!

Just a couple things...for writing on the internet, since we don't have indented paragraphs, putting an extra blank line between your paragraphs makes it easier to read.

The other thing is, if it was me writing it, I would have signed it "Hope" or "Jane", or some other first name...signing it "Mrs. Hansen" sort of gives away the "punch-line" before the PS. I think the surprise would be funnier if you didn't get a hint until the very end that this is an adult writing.

Just a possibility to consider!

Nice job. :)
   ~Posted by Douglas, Dec 16, 2009

lindareed
Dec 16, 2009
How's that? Thank you for your input. I really appreciate it.
   ~Posted by lindareed, Dec 16, 2009

Angel's Lie
Jun 25, 2010
Oh wow this totally just made my day. It's great.
   ~Posted by Angel's Lie, Jun 25, 2010

Ari James
Aug 27, 2010
That last line is what really sells this. Good job.
   ~Posted by Ari James, Aug 27, 2010



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