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A Choice: thoughts on the Fall, and how Adam may have felt when he made the choice to sin
Posted by 'Chelle, Nov 19, 2009. 1469 views. ID = 2978

A Choice

Posted by 'Chelle, Nov 19, 2009. 1469 views. ID = 2978
This post was written in 7 minutes.
This post is a Grab Bag which uses the following words: splint, campaign, purpose, ailment, breakdown, retrospective, hue, pitfall, uproot, naughtily
This post has been awarded 12 stars by 3 readers.

We cruise down the breakdown lane, ignoring the glares of other drivers. With his tiny arm in a splint, I do not care for law tonight. In retrospective, this will be my pitfall, but for now, I only wish to arrive at the safe haven of sterile whiteness, where his ailment will be identified. I drive with purpose. I pass with abandon. I am more focused than a presidential candidate on the campaign trail in October.
Behind me, I see the hue all motorists dread. Blue, flashing blue. I pray for a rogue pine to uproot itself and cut me off from all pursuers. I step on the gas. My child cries piteously in the backseat.
"Hush, love. Mother's here". I say it calmly, but my heart is racing. I cannot protect him from the dangers of life. I would give up everything to do so. Tonight I drive naughtily, as I have never done before. I do it for him. I sin for him. I think, as I race onwards into the night, that this perhaps, is how Adam felt in Eden. Recklessly throwing his innocence to the wind. Choosing to fall for the one he loved.

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This post has been awarded 12 stars by 3 readers.


Nov 22, 2009
This reminded me of something Mark Twain wrote...from Adam's Diary: "After all these years, I see that I was mistaken about Eve in the beginning; it is better to live outside the Garden with her than inside it without her."

Anyway, I'm glad you finally made it onto the site and got your email address confirmed. :D
   ~Posted by Douglas, Nov 22, 2009

Nov 24, 2009
I love that quote. Reminds me of...oh darn! I can't remember the name of the book. It's written like a poem, and it's all about Adam and Eve in Eden, and the fall, and ultimately Adam's sin is that he chooses Eve over God. It was amazingly powerful. When I think of the name of it, I'll let you know! ;p
   ~Posted by 'Chelle, Nov 24, 2009

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