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The life of a dancer: A sonnet about dancing
Posted by DiAnne, Nov 25, 2008. 1452 views. ID = 2054

The life of a dancer

Posted by DiAnne, Nov 25, 2008. 1452 views. ID = 2054
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I know this one's not great. It could use some revisions. Any suggestions?
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If you're a dancer you've danced in the rain
You've worked day and night to get to the stage
You've felt the pleasure, but also the pain
We all wish to write our names on that page
On the surface we leap and we can fly
We ballance and whirl on pink satin toes
Deep down the blisters and aches make us cry
It's secret, the audience never knows
But despite all the pain, we feel the thrill
This is the happiness for which I live
Yes, it's impossible, but still I will
Practice and practice, my time I will give
I live with the pain to feel the pleasure
Dancing, for me, is joy without measure

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Hannah
Nov 26, 2008
There shouldn't be a comma on the first sentence.
"It's a secret; the audience never knows"
Other than that, it's really good. :P
   ~Posted by Hannah, Nov 26, 2008



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