ADVICE: Somewhere in the Middle

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Forum : 2007 - 2008 Anthology : ADVICE: Somewhere in the Middle

Josiah T.
Posted at: Mar 11, 2008 at 5:28 PM 
Somewhere in Between

This (I thought) was one of my better pieces... (Not that it can't be improved upon :-P ) What does everybody else think?

Douglas
Posted at: Mar 13, 2008 at 4:21 AM 
I didn't notice any grammatical issues here - except possibly a comma or two where they were unnecessary. For example, I'm pretty sure the comma in the first sentence of the second paragraph is not needed. The fact that the items you're comparing are phrases rather than words makes you feel like you need a comma when you don't.

I'm caught between what I know I should do, and what I want to do.

Suppose "what I know I should do" = "good"
and "what I want to do" = "bad"

Then the sentence would read:

I'm caught between good, and bad.

And it's easier to see now that the comma is unnecessary.

Josiah T.
Posted at: Mar 13, 2008 at 4:24 AM 
Ah, thanks... I've always been a "comma addict." :-P

Josiah T.
Posted at: Mar 13, 2008 at 4:26 AM 
How's this...?

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